Okay, hereS a breakdown of the text, focusing on clarity and potential improvements for an English-speaking audience:
Overall Summary:
The article discusses Jaden Smith, son of Will Smith, being photographed in Paris wiht what appears to be a bong. It also touches on his past acting and music career, and his family’s openness about psychedelic drug use.
Detailed Breakdown and Suggestions:
“sat there,when photographers noticed them.”
This sentence fragment is a bit abrupt.It needs to be connected to the previous sentence or expanded. For example: “Jaden Smith and a companion were sitting on a park bench in Paris, when photographers noticed them.”
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weight=”font-weight-bold”>The object next to Smith caused fans to react. Apparently there was a big blue bong, shows pictures Dailymail has got a roof in.
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improved: “The object next to Smith sparked reactions from fans. Pictures published by the Daily Mail appear to show a large blue bong.”
Explanation:
“Sparked reactions” is more natural than “caused fans to react.”
“Published by the Daily Mail” is clearer than “Dailymail Has got a roof in.” The phrase “has got a roof in” doesn’t make sense in this context.
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Improved:
“What is a bong?
A bong is a type of pipe, frequently enough with a “choke” or carb (a hole that can be opened to allow air in), used to quickly inhale smoke. A water bong uses water to filter the smoke. Bongs are primarily used to smoke cannabis or marijuana.
In June 2023, Jaden Smith spoke openly about using psychedelic drugs like mushrooms and ayahuasca, stating that his mother, Jada Pinkett Smith, introduced him and the family to them during a conference on psychedelic science.”
Explanation:
“Pipe of choke” is awkward. “Type of pipe, often with a ‘choke’ or carb” is clearer.
“Faster pull out the smoke” is grammatically incorrect.”Quickly inhale smoke” is better.
“mariuana” is a misspelling of “marijuana.”
The sentence structure in the second paragraph is improved for better flow.
“The singer also had a lighter in his hand, but was not observed while using it. However, the person he was seen with both the bass and the lighter, the tabloid newspaper writes.”
Improved: “Smith was also holding a lighter, but was not seen using it.The Daily Mail reports that the person he was with was seen using both the bong and the lighter.”
Explanation:
Replaced “the person he was seen with both the bass and the lighter” with “the person he was with was seen using both the bong and the lighter” for clarity.
Replaced “tabloid newspaper writes” with “Daily Mail reports” for clarity and consistency.
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Over the years,Jaden has had several projects,both with and without his world -famous family.
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Together again after the fracture
he started his acting career as a four-year-old when he had a small role in the movie “But In Black II” from 2002, where his father played the lead role.
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Improved: “He began his acting career at age four with a small role in the 2002 film Men in Black II, which starred his father.”
Explanation:
“But In Black II” should be “Men in Black II“.
“Started his acting career as a four-year-old” is slightly awkward. “Began his acting career at age four” is more concise.
“Where his father played the lead role” is simplified to “which starred his father.”
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He played his first big role as a 8-year-old in the movie “Pursuit of Happiness” in 2006, where he also played against his father, Will.
